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[edit] Classmate's Views on Hardcore Mac n Cheese
[edit] Problrm sentence
At some point in life, she wants to be a teacher but oddly enough, UMASS doesn't offer that particular degree among the many thousands upon thousands that it bestows upon the graduating class every year.
SHE ((24d)vague reference pg. 267 "Pinguin Handbook") Christine is the she. He needs to specify. DOESN'T (Apostrophees, pg. 309)needs to be written full in writing does not MANY ((18d) pg. 231 Use Specific Languag "Pinguin Handbook")vague and overused It ((24d)vague reference pg. 267 "Pinguin Handbook")vague reference
At some point in life, Christine wants to be a teacher but oddly enough, UMASS does not offer that particular degree among the thousands upon thousands UMASS bestows upon the graduating class every year. Blendi 18:32, 1 October 2007 (EDT)
[edit] problem
"sentence with the problem"
find explanation - what's wrong and how to fix, explain Briefly. include citation info, section, page number
rewrite the sentence correctly
[edit] unspecified pronoun
"People make lots of assumptions about lots of things and usually, those things that they make assumptions about are wrong." pronouns should never leave the reader guessing about antecedents. vague reference page 268 penguin hand book.
[edit] apostrophes
It's interesting because it's very clear that she's thriving in Southwest but she doesn't really fit in with the typical scene of Southwest
Marco is not talking, it is not speech therefore he should not leave out sounds and syllables of familiar words. It's= It is (Apostrophes, pg. 309)
It is interesting because it is very clear that she is thriving in Southwest but she does not really fit in with the typical scene of Southwest
Evita 17:21, 27 September 2007 (EDT)
[edit] Italics/Underline Titles of Books
"Right now, she's reading A Million Little Pieces, the book that her literary highness Oprah decreed untouchable goods because of the supposed lies that the book contained within its many, many pages of incredibly fine print." - Hardcore Mac n Cheese
In the sentence, the book, A Million Little Pieces, needs to be italicized or underlined. This is because it is the title of a major work. (Penguin Handbook Chapter 34b Page. 323)
"Right now, she's reading A Million Little Pieces, the book that her literary highness Oprah decreed untouchable goods because of the supposed lies that the book contained within its many, many pages of incredibly fine print." - Hardcore Mac n Cheese
Ash 17:21, 27 September 2007 (EDT)
[edit] Fragments
"She likes to read. A lot."
These sentences are very choppy and could be made into one sentence. Section 21a, Page 248
She likes to read, a lot.
- Sshorr 17:22, 27 September 2007 (EDT)
[edit] Italics
"She's a self proclaimed homebody with an affinity, like most girls, for the infamous television series Sex and the City who would rather sit in on Friday nights with a blanket and pillow than with a bottle and ping pong ball."
The titles of television shows are supposed to be italicized in print. To fix this, all Marco has to do is italicize "Sex and the City". section 34 "Capitalization and Italics" pg. 323.
Corrected: She's a self proclaimed homebody with an affinity, like most girls, for the infamous television series Sex and the City who would rather sit in on Friday nights with a blanket and pillow than with a bottle and ping pong ball. AmandaS 17:28, 27 September 2007 (EDT)
[edit] Possessive Pronouns
"So for now, she's going to get a degree in either biology or psychology until she can go to graduate school where she will learn the fine art of teaching. "
Possessive nouns are fomed with apostrophes. It is contractions.
Corrected: So for now, she is going to get a degree in either biology or psychology until she can go to graduate school where she will learn the fine art of teaching.
WinMi 18:28, 27 September 2007 (EDT)
[edit] Books Titles Should Always be Italicized in Print
Right now, she's reading A Million Little Pieces, the book that her literary highness Oprah decreed untouchable goods because of the supposed lies that the book contained within its many, many pages of incredibly fine print.
The titles of entire works including books, magazines, newspapers, and films are always italicized or underlined in print. (Section: Italics 34b, Pg. 323)
Right now, she's reading A Million Little Pieces, the book that her literary highness Oprah decreed untouchable goods because of the supposed lies that the book contained within its many, many pages of incredibly fine print.
Stephanie 17:26, 27 September 2007 (EDT)
[edit] Some Group Feedback
Overall, the group found the paper to be very creative. Each of us found the introduction to be interesting, honest, risky, and entertaining. There was a great divide concerning the tone of the paper---about half of the group found it to be mean, while the other half found it humorous. We also thought it was fascinating that Marco kept a dialouge with his audience. He also stunned us with his insightful lesson on character an first impresssions. Despite our differences, we agreed that it was a good paper.
Nothing is perfect, and so we did have a few problems with the paper. Some people said that it lacked structure, while others said that there were problems with diction and flow. We all agreed that some of the phrases were confusing and had poor word choice. The paper also had several run-on sentences. One idea was never developed, concerning Christine's "Huntington Beach" attitude---what does he mean? In the group there was some sentiment that it was definitely not sensitively written in regard to Christine's feelings and how she was being presented to the audience.
Finally, we consiered three narrative threads: stereotypes, irony/contraditcion, and disproving contradiction. They essentially say the same thing, meaning that Marco took his first impression/stereotypical idea of Christine and disproved it in his paper. Thus, the paper is ironic because Christine is presented as a (for lack of better word choice) ditz and later in the paper her thirst for literature is discussed, not to mention her aspirations of becoming a teacher. Pasta sauce 13:28, 28 September 2007 (EDT)
[edit] group work
We thought the strengths of the paper was that it kept your attention, the introduction was very captivating because it was so different, it was interesting to read, he was witty and honest. We did not think any ideas were confusing, we thought the paper was clear and very straight forward. He had a way of creating humor with his writing by being very descriptive and instead of just listing things about Christine, like stating facts, he added his own opinion of her. However he seemed mean at first, by the end of the paper he finally says something nice about her.
Evita 23:30, 30 September 2007 (EDT)
[edit] Reaction to Introduction
When I first read your paper I was a little offended. Although in the end you categorized Christine as an exception to the stereotype, it bothered me that you would categorize her at all before meeting her. As a victim of the “dumb blonde” stereotype I feel it is so imperative that people know me before they judge me. I think that overall you did a good job in representing Christine and you wrote the paper in a way that was interesting. Stephanie 20:59, 1 October 2007 (EDT)
[edit] chat
The four tildas thing is pretty cool, I agree. :-) I am feeling swell this Saturday morning, looking forward to a peachy day! I'm enjoying reading and responding to everyone's messages. You come across all bubbly and cheerful, which is fun - as in neat-o-keen! Does your diction change when your mood is gloomy? (Mine does, it seems I have to think much harder about my choices when I'm not feeling well.)
[edit] how brave are you feeling?!
Hi, I just gave Marco some feedback on his introduction of you. I'd like to do an activity with the class about how I give feedback...do you think this would feel ok to you?
- AND (!), I got feedback posted to you, too, regarding your piece on Christine. Can I use it, too, or would this be pushing my luck?!
[edit] your page looks great!
One question though (I've been through the mill on this!), your format recommendation links directly to text of the formal assignment without attribution. The way it is presented - without a clarifying citation comment - makes it appear as if you wrote it. My first take was awe: what great material you provided your biographer! My second take was, wait a minute (!), this is familiar! Did you copy-and-paste? My third was, oh, no, you linked to my text. Fourth (and finally), I wrote that modifying the Writing Program's basic template - which I did not credit! Oops! We - the wiki editors especially, but also the entire class - needs to think about how to indicate proper credit. None of us want to be accused of plagiarism. We need to establish when hyperlinking is adequate and when more detail needs to be provided.
As to the pictures, we need (as a class) to have a conversation about the risk of putting images onto the Internet, especially without copyright protection. One of the things the wiki editorial team could investigate is what type of Creative Commons license to put on the site. You can definitely post any of you, but we will need individual authorization for images of anyone else before we can post them, ok?
[edit] Template
Not sure what you mean. I created a template: Template:COM375_Userpage. If you click "edit" on my userpage you'll see how the template in implemented. However it's not going to be much use for ENG112. You probably want to take a look an the template I made, and modify it for you're own use. It's not quite as customizable as I wanted, but it definately gets the job done. You could also create a template just for the part of a page that is the same on everyone's page... Just to save you copy-paste time.
If you have any questions, let me know. the template guide is here:
http://www.mediawiki.org/wiki/Help:Templates#Using_a_template
- ElR6 19:48, 6 November 2007 (EST)
[edit] feedback: introducing Odin
hey. I posted (finally!) some bold and italicized feedback on "Rudolph". (How did you come up with that title?!) Steph(talk) 22:24, 7 October 2007 (EDT)
[edit] Wikiteam
Remember we meet after class today; go read this if you can and follow the links! Steph(talk) 15:21, 23 October 2007 (EDT)
[edit] notes and more notes
Hopefully you have already read the notes I posted from our meeting last Tuesday, and have been diligently thinking about how to put your/our ideas into action. Marco's schematic is terrific, but let's give it a round of scrutiny/revision before we plunge headlong into? Although it might be that plunging is the best option and we adapt as we encounter obstacles. We've also got to do some research to see what is actually possible within the confines of the UMassWiki structure. I did forward the files Marco constructed on to ElR6 to see if he thinks the coding for such a template is do-able. I also answered the questions ElR6 had asked me prior to our first meeting. Check 'em out! Steph(talk) 12:48, 28 October 2007 (EDT)
[edit] Elarsix contributes
cool and useful info! Steph(talk) 13:18, 8 November 2007 (EST)
[edit] tell me more
Hi - "something we have to read" does not give me enough information to know how to answer your question! You've got to be much more specific, please. :-/
[edit] got it!
thanks - I totally spaced putting in the link! It is there now. :-)
[edit] Misplaced Page
Hi, I noticed you removed the {{MisplacedPage}} template from Hippies. Since that page contains work for a class, it needs to either be in the Class namespace or a subpage of your userpage, depending on whatever scheme your professor uses. I replaced the tag -- it contains useful instructions on moving the page into the proper location. Please don't remove it as I use it to find and delete misplaced pages periodically, usually after they've been moved. Thanks! --GMorehou(talk) 00:34, 6 December 2007 (EST)
- I've moved the following misplaced pages to be subpages of your user page:
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