Who's Judging

The prelude statement was “You are your own judge. The verdict is up to you.” Though this is an intriguing quote it has nothing to do with the biographical piece linked to it. We thought the writer did a great job describing what it was like for a young Albanian boy to immigrate to this country. The flow of the piece made it easy to read as well as entertaining. The writer did a good job explaing some of the cultural differences between the two countries and how hard it can be for a family to adapt to a new way of life. “You are your own judge. The verdict is up to you.” The content of Blendi's paper was unclear as to what he was judging. Whether it was to make the move to America and accept his new life and language or what, but his choice to surround himself in the language changed his life. --Com375 23:30, 15 October 2007 (EDT)and --Jwanamak 23:44, 15 October 2007 (EDT)

The Athlete's Character is revealed

we really enjoyed Ash's essay. It really showed why the athlete revealed character. The organization of the paper was good and followed a nice order that readers could easily follow the athletes life. Some ideas get mixed up in some paragraphs. The author showed why he was a great person by writing what he did, but we think there should be a little more 'how.' How did he cheer up his teammates? We also thought that the prelude statement was well written. we did not expect this type of paper but it really brought it all together when the author explained the athlete's situation and how he dealt with it. The athlete really did reveal his character and the author brought that across is her writing. --DNA 12:15, 5 October 2007 (EDT) and --JapaneseGum 03:23, 9 October 2007 (EDT)

Marco is Great

The Biography was very interesting and included a lot of humor. On the note of organization Marco needs to focus on what he has done vs. personality traits. We liked how he started from the beginning of his life to the end, although try not to make it sound like an advertisement. Try to use (He) instead of Marco Cross. His ideas were very concise, try to focus more when writing about future aspirations. The biography was very logical, try to organize your thoughts to make sure that a reader that does not know about you will understand. “Keep a weather eye on the world, and the world will be yours”. Considering that Marco wants to be a politician, this statement fits him well. He wants to change things in the world, and keep an eye out on his family. --CAMARO 14:10, 4 October 2007 (EDT) and --Ntourloukis 14:14, 4 October 2007 (EDT)

Stop sucking up.... NOW

The Prelude Statement was “A Suck-up’s Guide to the Teacher”. After reading the statement, it is very obvious what this statement means. The student who wrote this is the biggest suck-up this university has ever seen. S/he spends the entire essay giving the reader a very rose-colored description of Steph. Paragraphs are spent praising every aspect of her teaching strategy. It was very well-written, with a good vocabulary and impressive structure. There was a clear introduction and conclusion. Overall, the suck-up is a pretty good writer --Dolly 14:12, 4 October 2007 (EDT) and --WrittenOnTheSubwayWalls

Does this really relate?

We liked the fact that they used their experiences contrasting Albania from the United States regarding alcohol practices. We liked that he writes about all the differences between each culture. We think that he could relate the piece a little bit more to the actual quote about being your own judge. Although this is a well written piece about their life experiences in both countries, we feel that there should have been a more appropriate title and that the article should have been related more to the quote and how we are the only ones who can judge ourselves. The prelude statement discusses how we are the only ones who can ultimately decide what is good and right for us in our lives. His piece discusses more experiences that he had rather than going back to the original prelude statement. We thought it was going to be about culture in the sense that he might have been discriminated against when he got to the US. Instead, it was more about the life of Blendi. --Evan 14:14, 4 October 2007 (EDT) and --GinaaHHh 14:14, 4 October 2007 (EDT)

Very In Depth, very interesting

Evita’s biography of Stephanie was very concise and it was easy to tell she and Stephanie had a very deep conversation. There were many ideas and they were all very logical and interesting, drawing me to want to read on. There was a very good mix of Stephanie’s academic goals as well as a lot of her personal life. The organization was pretty good in most cases, but there were times where transition was not very smooth from academics to personal life. For example, in the same paragraph the author went from talking about Stephanie wanting to possibly be a biology major to her family members going to jail without a smooth transition. Other than, the biography was very interesting and had some very good ideas explored. I like how Evita structured the piece to show cause and effect. The quote describes this biography very well, as Stephanie has had some tough times in her life and in return has worked very hard. She is a member of many clubs and has taken many AP tests. She even tested out of the class, but still took it anyway. Dan kozuch 20:15, 4 October 2007 (EDT) --Bela 12:26, 5 October 2007 (EDT)

Cryday the 13th

We liked how the author used the concept of Friday the 13th to raise emotions within the reader. Because the idea of Friday the 13th is one associated with bad things, the fact that a great thing happened on the day makes it that much more compelling of a story. How the author set the story up with her being a hardworking, smart kid from elementary school was another tactic to raise compassions inside of the reader. The article is very well organized, and the words flow together. The prelude statement, “Friday the 13th is unlucky for some… but not for me!” fits the story perfectly because it tells the reader that something good happened to this person on Friday the 13th. --Amanda Huggenkis 13:04, 5 October 2007 (EDT)--Bluesky123 23:10, 7 November 2007 (EST)

directions (for context and future planning)

As individuals with more college writing experience than first semester students, please click through on your approved Prelude Statement.

1. Please ignore grammar and focus on the a) ideas, b) organization, and c) logic of the biographical statement. Discuss these three areas with your teammate and generate a brief statement of constructive feedback to the author. Include at least one strength and one area for improvement in each of these three areas.
2. Finally, explain the evidence in the biographical statement that supports or lends itself to the Prelude Statement. In particular, what relationship(s) do you perceive between the Prelude Statement and the writing which it introduces?

Procedure: construct your answer in a Word document and save it. Then return here to copy-and-paste it into this page's Table of Contents, using the same technique for creating a title which you have now practiced twice. Sign your work! Have your partner log in separately to sign it also (extra credit for you both).

• Final Interwiki Activity Step! Identify where to insert a direct, internal link from your feedback to the biographical statement you are reviewing, and then do it. This means selecting or adding words, a phrase, or the title that you and your teammate think ought to be highlighted in blue to indicate the hyperlink. Instructions regarding the different types of links are provided in the Help pages (last item in the Navigation menu to the left). Get used to using the Help menu! The Help menu is a key tool for familiarizing yourself with the vocabulary of the wiki. (Note: you will be learning new vocabularies for your entire life - at least as long as you have a job and/or interest in the world.)

• And now, The End! When you have successfully inserted and tested your link, please review the Homework due October 9th and 11th.

Who will be first? Who will be last? Prizes for both.

If classtime runs out before you finish, you and your partner have until 5:00 pm tomorrow, Friday, October 5, to complete the WikiQuiz. Please post a message to Steph on my Usertalk page to announce your time of completion. Steph^(talk) 11:22, 4 October 2007 (EDT)